22.3.12

Love Me...Or Not!

She is fine, She is hot

She is sexy, She is not

You confuse my life with a stereotype

The type you see in movies and the likes

Love me or not, I remain me



She is short, She is big

She is tall, She is slim

You make me feel like just a thing

Like I have no right to just be me

Love me or not, I’ll still be me



I see those smiles which are nothing but sneers

Your snide remarks have filled my ears

I wonder if my life must go on the blink

Just because I don’t care what you think

Love me or not, I can’t stop being me



A life of my own, that’s all I ask

I seek no glory or attention to bask

Let me be fat, I don’t give two cents

I can be fat, to my heart’s content

Love me or not, I love being me



I will make no apologies for who I am

Nor change myself for your praises to amass

I will walk the streets with my head up high

Not caring for the evil stares burrowed in your eyes

Love me or not, its yours truly…Me

36 comments:

  1. u try no be small. I sha hope say some guy somewhere no de try play wit ur emotions ooh cos he will av me 2 answer 2. Lolz! Nice piece dearie, kip inspiring d lot.

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    1. LOL...if I have you to fight for me, then what else.

      Thanks loads

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  2. I couldn't agree with you more. Nice

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  3. Hey fope, thanks for dropping by.

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  4. Cool! Right on!

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    1. Thank you for reading and dropping a comment!

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  5. I like your poem,it's great!

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    1. Awww...thank you! I appreciate your comment

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  6. Great sense of self! Good for you! Just remember, when people look at us,
    they're most often thinking their own (often troubling) thoughts, and not really
    seeing us at all--just looking through everything and everyone. I did that the day
    my Daddy died. Just know you are exactly the way God made you, and revel in it!
    You go, girl!

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    1. I'm really sorry about your Dad.

      Thanks for dropping a comment, and I will revel in the "me" made by God...make sure you do the same.

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  7. nice poem...just want to say that if you care to much about what others think of you, you will not enjoy life to its fullness...let them see you for who you are and not what they want you to be...keep up the creative writting :)

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  8. "Praises to amass arrives abrubtly in the poem", taking the reader away from the end-rhyme. The tone is angry with a note of personal victory for the woman you are portraying: she is saying, "I do not need a man to make my life complete." Try to challenge yourself and take a greater distance by writing in 2nd or 3rd person. As it is now, you have done a great job! Keep writing!

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    1. Hi Robbin...thanks for reading my poem. I do have write in the 2nd and 3rd person (usually 3rd), but those are short stories. Most of my poems just come out in the 1st person...I guess I have to work on that angle. Thanks for your comment!

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  9. I love the progression of strength in the poem from "I remain me" to "I love being me" I would love some more senses in the poem, some smells, some sounds, some texture. I believe that the message is strong and can only be stronger with stronger images: what does hot sound like? Thanks for putting this our for us to read

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    1. Thank you Kimberly, I am glad you read the poem and I appreciate your view.

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  10. I like what you are saying, Tiwa. I too like the buildup from "I remain" to "I love being me." Your writing free verse works well, but I'm wondering about the rhythm of the piece. Some of the lines, especially in the last verse, tend to be cumbersome and lose the rhythm of the piece. Perhaps a better poet than I could give more comment on this.

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    1. Thank you still Sharon, your comment and view is good enough for me. Thank you again!

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  11. That was was very beautiful and touching, thank you for sharing with us.

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  12. hmmm . a portrait of a self confident individual who chooses to avoid the chatter of negativity.
    mingled with a dash of pride and high confidence......and.......

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    1. I am glad to know that you appreciate it Ted. Thank you

      Your inference of the poem is so on point. Thanks for reading Tshombye

      And I especially love this line from your piece - Ability Within on your blog "As we grow into who we are, we will realize who’s we are..."

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  13. I liked this... as others have said, it has an angry, defiant tone, but not a hateful one. It has a very positive, important message. Thanks for sharing :)

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  14. Sorry to be different but I see a girl who is hurting and even though she is pretty much saying love me for who I am, she is wondering why no one does and is very insecure and angry and feels the whole world si against her. Po

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    1. Nothing to be sorry about Gary...the truth is you adequately captured my exact feelings when I penned down this piece...and its nice to know you could see throught to it. However, it was a fleeting emotion

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  15. Hi Tiwa,

    You made me smile... The poem is a little angry indeed, but I do understand the cry of your heart to be accepted just as you are,

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    1. Hi Monika, I read your piece...first I like the title and then I liked the message passed. This line though did not sit well with me, "Yet, although she mastered the art of enticement
      She needs a lot more men can give, or have". It felt like there was a tense mix up.

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  16. The angry is good. It demonstrates passion and there is place for it. I agree with Engels to experiment writing it from different pod, i.e. 2nd or 3rd person. A while ago I h
    listened to a great poetry discussion on NPR. One speaker mentioned the broadening of audience reception by using the third person or even a name to make an example poem less personal and less like a rant. We hear rants all day long and tend to tune them out, to hear, but not truly listen. I love your stuff and where you seem to be going. I want to read more. Please ... continue to share.

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    1. I am really encouraged by your comment Michael, thank you very much. And I will definitely give writing poetry in a different POV a shot.

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  17. Your poem can be from any woman around the world, from any strata in society and that brings the biggest appeal or food for thought. I like the style of the poem and its strength....

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  18. It' sounds like a text for a new hit

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  19. I like the intonation of your poem, it clearly states a 'latent anger' that builds into an expressed anger, but I think you could get to the expressed anger more quickly - please note that I am not an established poet, but a novice one, happy to share some of my words in the future

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  20. I think we need to see the face of our blogger.Your stories and poems stirs up a lot of thots and passion.ur choice of words connects with the reader easily.put up a pic

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